Does my first chapter seem okay?

Chapter 1:New Girl
My eyes popped open the second before my alarm clock went off. I lifted the coffin lid and shut off the alarm clock viciously before I had the chance to murder it accidentally. I closed the coffin lid and then headed into the bathroom to shower hastily. The warm water woke me up more politely than that damn alarm clock did.
After blow-drying my hair and slipping on my light pink bathrobe, I headed down stairs to get some breakfast.
"Asmerelda Novuel Osborne, it’s six o’clock in the morning and I’m still asleep! Don’t be late for school and be quiet," shouted my twenty year old sister, Vasilisa. While she’d been shouting at me, I’d already grabbed two granola bars and poured some pulp-free orange juice.
"Sure thing, Liss.", I said with my mouth full. After chewing and swallowing both granola bars down, I poured the remains of the orange juice in the sink and rinsed it out. I practically flew up the stairs so I could get dressed and finish up getting ready for school.
When I got in there, Lissa was already out of her coffin.
"Good morning," she greeted me while yawning and then went to the bathroom. I scanned my closet for something to wear. I picked out a simple and long-sleeved light pink shirt and faded jeans. Lacing my black hightops on, I went to the dresser and looked in the mirror. I was well aware that I had both a face and a body to die for.
At five feet, eight inches tall, I was healthy skinny and had hard muscle packed into my body. I had skin that was as white as snow and rose-red cheeks. My hair was waist-length, thin and midnight-black. It framed an oval-shaped face with high cheekbones, full lips, a straight and thin nose, and dark-emerald eyes that were framed with long and thick eyelashes.
"Asmerelda, are you almost ready?", Lissa asked. I then looked away from the mirror and whirled to see Lissa in her white satin bathrobe and her hair wrapped in a towel.
"Almost," I said. I grabbed my gray sweatshirt and threw it over my long-sleeved shirt. Grabbing the dark blue stringbag and threw it onto my back.
"Now I’m ready. Thanks, Liss," I said. I kissed her on the cheek and she kissed my forehead.
"Good luck, Asmerelda," Lissa said.
Then I ran down the stairs and ran out the front door. It was pouring rain outside. I pulled the hood of my sweatshirt up and walked into the rain.
Today was my first day in the small and rainy town Caspian Rivers, Washington. Actually, it was just my first day of Caspian Rivers High School; yesterday had been my first day. I liked it here. It was sunless and small, not like Los Angeles. I’d been living in Los Angeles with my Aunt Lydia when Lissa had asked me to come live with her in Caspian Rivers. I’d said yes because I hated Los Angeles; the sunlight had made me more thirsty and run on a noctural scheulde.
By the way, I am Asmerelda Novuel Osborne, a fifteen year old dhampir (half-human and half-vampire). I’m the daughter of vampire Lord Julius Louis Osborne and deceased human Lynn Dee Conta Osborne. I’m also the sister of Vasilisa Jane Osborne. She’s twenty years old and a dhampir too. My father left me when I was seven months old and my mother had died when I was seven years old.
I was so nervous but excited. My mind replayed the words Lissa had told me before bed last night.
‘Come on, Asmerelda. You’ll make plenty of friends, I mean who wouldn’t like you? You’re brave, beautiful, sweet, and loving. You’ll be just fine.’ Those were the words she’d told me and I had stuck in my head.
I was now in the front of the school. I was really nervous now. I knew I looked nothing like the average girl from Los Angeles-tan, blonde, blue-eyed, rich, a preppy and selfish cheerleader or volleyball player.
Sighing, I lingered in the shadows. I felt an aura of nervousness around me and I wished the aura would me make invisible.
Then I stepped out of the shadows and walked onto the sidewalk.
Everyone saw me and gasped. I guessed they were suprised by how I looked or that I made a fashion goof.
Sighing, I continued my way to the office, fighting tears the whole way.

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